that the crowed was so big the had to put a wire fence up two people were pushed through the fence and one hurt their leg trying to get over the fence.
Hi Kyan, Can you imagine how crazy it was for the police to get the crowd under control?! I enjoyed reading this task. You did answer the activity very objectively. Please, consider to add full stops and make a bullet list for this type of answer. For the future, I want you to add to your post the description of the activity as this would help your followers to understand what is that you are writing about. Remember that your blog is public, so anybody around the world can read it.
Furthermore, I want you to think about adding an image to support your written as well, as this would make your post more eye-catching and interesting. Keep up the good work! Kia Kaha, Patricia
Hi Kyan,
ReplyDeleteCan you imagine how crazy it was for the police to get the crowd under control?! I enjoyed reading this task. You did answer the activity very objectively. Please, consider to add full stops and make a bullet list for this type of answer.
For the future, I want you to add to your post the description of the activity as this would help your followers to understand what is that you are writing about. Remember that your blog is public, so anybody around the world can read it.
Furthermore, I want you to think about adding an image to support your written as well, as this would make your post more eye-catching and interesting.
Keep up the good work!
Kia Kaha,
Patricia